Helena~

[kazuki]

Operator Name: Helena Moonshire
Operator Nickname: Ghost wench.
Age: 14
gender: female
Height: 4'3''
Weight: 93 lbs.
Birthday: May fifteenth.
Occupation: none.
Location: wherever.
Organization: none.


Operator Appearance: she's a very eerie looking girl, whom many people avoid.

~Hair: brown.
~Eyes: blue.
~Skin: pale.
~Outfit: a long white sweater and brown pants, with sneakers.

Operator Personality: dank, dreary, and its rare to hear a laugh.

Operator History: Her mother dying at child birth, and her father not wanting to take care of her because of medical issues, she was simply left in an orphanich. she was never adopted, so she has grown up cold. she hasn't learned many things as such, and part of her can't verifiy if she's even a person any more.

Other Info: She has been known to refuse to talk to people out of fear.

Quote: "... please just leave me alone..."

NetNavi

Navi Name: Benjamin.
Navi Nickname: none.
Navi Type: custom. he was a rouge A.I. converted to a navi given to his net op.
element- normal.
Navi Gender: male
HP: 600.
dodge:3
block: 3
Navi Appearance: a tall man, around 11'11'' inches tall, with long hair.
~Hair: brown and black, with tints of white.
~Eyes: emerald green.
~Skin: pale
~Plug-Suit/Armor: he has more of a cat-like build. but wears normal cloths
~Other: he can change to one other form, and it is beast like, and has been called 'diablo.'
Navi profile: He had spent most of his twenty years on the under net, before a scilab employee had converted him to a navi. to avoid getting fired for this, he dumped Benjamin on Helena, saying that she needed a navi. He's wamred up to the girl, and wishes to get her out of her downward spiral.

Navi Info: kind hearted, merciful, and very giving. but in contrast to that, he can be cruel, and phycotic.
Navi Icon: a scythe.

Quote: "You haven't a clue who you're dealing with, do you?"

Normal weapons: claws..
Virus Busting Level: S.
P.E.T. Color: black.

ATTACKS~

1. Standard: Rai- sends a long range burst of energy that will stun foes for three seconds. 20 Damage.

2. Standard: Resh- essensially makes him faster, but only for a minute. he can't attack with any of his cood attacks, and it can only be done once an hour. 0 Damage.

3. Standard:Quetal- it is a short burst of Energy that both moves Benjamin back a bit to get momentum to move, and distracts his foe. 15 Damage.

4. standard: Kiriaria- a large crystal forms, shouting out random elemental attacks. easy to destroy, but its effective. 50 Damage.

5. Mega: Blade of Yore- he has the ability to weild a large blade with chains attached for beating and strangling for fifteen minutes. slows him down. 120 Damage.

6. Mega: Hand of Gabriel- *to be gained* once he ganes this, he has lesser telepithy- he can move things the size of an average person, but he can only hold them down for short periods of time- he cannot do any damage while doing this, unless droping them from a great hight. but they are likely to survive. 150 Damage.

7. Mega: Xeth- he gains scythe like tails, and he can use them to fight. however, he is VERY likely to trip himself. 200 Damage.

8. Giga: Diablo- he gains his form, and only when injured. 500 Damage. little accuracy to contrast.

[Yggdrasil]

There are 2 problems with this profile

1.The title should show both the operator (if there is one) and the Navi's name.

2. the attacks are way to weak to be a threat, even if used in rapid succession.

[Jim Van]

Upon re-inspection of the attacks, I found these problems:

1. Standard: Rai- sends a long range burst of energy that will stun foes for three seconds. 20 Damage.

You cannot stun without the Elec or Modify element.

2. Standard: Resh- essensially makes him faster, but only for a minute. he can't attack with any of his cood attacks, and it can only be done once an hour. 0 Damage.

Please turn any time into rounds (turns per-person). Also, you cannot improve any abilities or stats without the Modify element.

4. standard: Kiriaria- a large crystal forms, shouting out random elemental attacks. easy to destroy, but its effective. 50 Damage.

5. Mega: Blade of Yore- he has the ability to weild a large blade with chains attached for beating and strangling for fifteen minutes. slows him down. 120 Damage.

You must have Sword element to use Swords or Blades.

Define elemental. This would require a cycle which would disrupt your entire move set. Fix.

6. Mega: Hand of Gabriel- *to be gained* once he ganes this, he has lesser telepithy- he can move things the size of an average person, but he can only hold them down for short periods of time- he cannot do any damage while doing this, unless droping them from a great hight. but they are likely to survive. 150 Damage.

Where did you state he had telepathy? Please list that as a Unique Ability and explain what it does exactly.

7. Mega: Xeth- he gains scythe like tails, and he can use them to fight. however, he is VERY likely to trip himself. 200 Damage.

As I said before: You need Sword element to use sword attacks. Sword also stretches to Blades, Spears, Scythes, Spikes, and Daggers.

8. Giga: Diablo- he gains his form, and only when injured. 500 Damage. little accuracy to contrast.

You need Modify or Stealth to change your form.

I should have paid more attention to your attacks... fix them. And remember, you can only hold two elements before having to go into a cycle.

[kazuki]

Oh, screw it.... this system's just way to complicated for me... >.<

[Jim Van]

You never read it <.<;

You went in.... two minutes later you came out. Really... how can you learn something in two minutes ?_?

[Yggdrasil]

We can help you if you ask. just read the rules and make a navi that uses fewer elements.